Charlie II

Banned because you have filled the Randomosity forum with your cupcake avatar. And it's glucose intolerant.

Hey there Walkitch! This is a nice little piece but I'm sure we can find a few things to make it even better. Paragraphing At the moment we've only got ...

Oh did you say "dangerous"? Then count me in! 8)

Hey there SwallowedByInsanity! A piece of advice I've found that words are actually a lot stronger than sticks or stones in my experience. If this is something that you intend ...

Hey there t4yd3491 -- that's an interesting name you've got there to go with an interesting article! Structure To begin with, I know you're said this is just a snippet ...

Nick | Heading South If he was quite honest, Nick was only remembering about half the stuff Katya and Hayden were telling him. Making sure he could stay on his ...

*high five* Excellent job, Rosey!

*views* It looks nice and blue to me, Nate! As a writers' forum I'm sure we're all just happy to have the literary works back (and storybooks :D). Have a ...

Who'd have thought the Apollo update would only recognise it's creator? :P

Team Rocket | Mimeton Manor Interior Mandy draped herself over the throne like a cat on a mat. Except, perhaps, a bit more stylishly and luxuriantly. She was born for ...

Nick | The Track to Mimeton Manor They took the track down towards the forest, southwards, from the cabin on the hill. The trees leaned against each other, all heavily ...

I'm going to spread the news by liking this -- seems the most effective method to me!

Nick | Mimeton Hills Nick could practically hear the Pallet Town theme playing as he sat down for breakfast with his father. It was a cool, crisp winter day and, ...

I listen to this so much, it's unreal. I think my favourite has got to be the instrumental "Your hand in mine". That's lovely to work to, and even nicer ...

Hey Anoia, You've got an interesting start here -- a fantastic hook along with all the appropriate excitement and tension and action. It works well as a hook, but is ...